Friday, November 18, 2011

''Shark attack''

    Once there was a shark that was so hungry he found a girl that was swimming at the sea by herself and the shark caught her by the leg.  She started to scream because she was in the middle of the sea.  Next morning a boy name Daniel y found a girls head in the sea so he called Cesar H and he said what the heck happen here.  On Monday Cesar H and Daniel y saw the shark jump up high in the air he was bigger than a white wale he almost bit us.   Finally Cesar H shot the shark right in the mouth the shark explode and all his body came at us and we jump out the helicopter and we survived.

1 comment:

  1. This story was a little violent but gave detail about the shark and what was happening. The ending could have had more detail.

    run-on sentences
    wale-> whale

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